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PostSubject: Re: Guardian of Earth - Book 1 - Child    Guardian of Earth - Book 1 - Child  Icon_minitimeSat Jan 18, 2014 5:57 am

It was a fine intro ^u^

Okie, not time to check ze stuff. Red text is spelling errors.

I also have to say that there is a few grammar issues, but it's not something that bothers me :3
NOTE: I'm not going to point out all spelling errors, just the ones that are noticeably bad.

Sure, he wasn't a mathematician, but he had conman sense.


I liked it anyway, and I look forward to ze next chapter ^o^

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PostSubject: Re: Guardian of Earth - Book 1 - Child    Guardian of Earth - Book 1 - Child  Icon_minitimeSun Jan 19, 2014 12:15 pm

A happy ending to chapter two ^u^

A few grammar issues were present (once again, it doesn't bother me at all since there is barely anyone that can get that right. Including myself really xD), but the biggest "bug" was the spelling of the very first sentence. "A day has passed before Trillion regained conscientiousness."

I have done worse in the past, and it is a damn hard word to spell xD

At any rate, I will leave this with 7.8 in score. Very nice chapter, though I might be a sucker for sweet stuff. TTuTT

Also, Snubble is just a freaking cute name.

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It was good, not much more to say. It's very Dragonball in the way their logic Works, and through a bit of questioning, a lot of things made sense. 7.5 to this one. ^o^

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